14 February, 2011

Edited Script

 Hey guys, for Hawking's replacement, I'm seeing a frail old man in a wheel chair, he can move his arms (though he has trouble raising them, and picking up heavy-ish objects.... like a mug of tea). Hes a bit shakey, maybe huge glasses that magnify his eyes, scraggly crazy hair. Kinda the robot chicken scientist but helpless and not as crazy. Harold, Arthur, Walter, Norman, whatever old person name people want to call him. I'll go with Norman for now, edits in yellow.




Start on long shot of Norman in wheelchair. There’s a monkey at the blackboard..writing out an immensely complicated series of equations. Window is open behind Norman. They are on the 4th floor in a busy city.

Norman shakes his head as the monkey writes on the board looking disappointed at the monkeys mistake.

monkey screeches
He points angerly at the board, gesturing where his mistake was made, to keep this mainly silent we can have him grunt, and smacks the monkey on the back of his head.

monkey screeches again but louder and throws chalk
Norman has had enough of the monkeys bad attitude, shoots him a glare as he wheels himself away.

Monkey freaks out, leaps out the window.

Norman- Wait...Monkey where have you gone? What have I done?

The monkey bounces off an awning...flies through a clothes line, comes out dressed as a woman smoking a pipe. From the street you hear a cat-call whistle.

(Guy on street (off camera) - It’s a monkey!

Another guy (off camera)- I know...) Can show these two as the monkey goes by, they look at each other confused and shrug

Monkey dressed as a woman lands in a baby carriage. A woman leans over and looks into the carriage. I didn’t know you had twins Mikki. Cut to inside of carriage to show two monkeys sucking their thumbs. Lady, I don’t! Takes fake monkey out, and kicks him off screen.

Cut to hot dog vendor. He’s just put a new weenie in a bun and hands it over to a guy in a ball cap. The guy squirts some ketchup on it, then turns to pay the hot dog vendor. Just then when the guys head is turned the monkey zips into the hot dog bun, and knocks the weenie out. The guy turns back to take a bite, but the monkey notices, kisses him on the lips, and jumps off screen.

Cut back to Norman trying to write on the board, he can stretch but he cant reach the top of the board, his arms shake as he reaches. As he stretches too far, he can't support himself and topples over into the wall, and pushes himself back upright, looking defeated.


-Cut back to monkey-
Monkey falls in the back seat of a rickshaw. Monkey is relieved, wipes sweat off his brow, but then is shocked at the driver/puller of the rickshaw. Cut to the front of the rickshaw, and it’s himself, Universe the monkey pulling it. Pull out wider to reveal the monkey pulling the cart with no one in the back. Cut to monkeys point of view to show a bunch of nuns crossing the street slowly. Monkey tries to stop but there’s no breaks and he’s running too fast.

Big explosion, nuns become angels and/or winged pandas and start floating up to heaven.

Cut back to monkey and he comes back down landing on one of the wheels from the cart and rides it like a unicycle. rotate camera 180 degrees and stop following monkey as he bombs a series of hills screaming.

Cut to interior of Norman's house...Norman is wheeling across a room..

Norman goes to the fridge and starts to pull on the door with all his might using both hands, he struggles, and finally the door swings open sending him backwards and flipping his wheelchair on it's side. He looks grumpy and snaps his finger as if to say "darn"


Cut back to screaming monkey as he charges camera and we enter his mouth. The unicycle hits a curb and Universe is tossed up into the air, collides with a streetlight, spins around the pole with the streetlight, and is flung back the way he came through the sky.

Cut back to Norman’s room
Wheel chair is on it’s side. Norman is being pecked by many vultures, he tries to shield his face, looking scared and in pain.

Monkey flies in through the window, lands, and scares all the vultures away.
The monkey helps Norman up in his chair, dusts him off, looking happy to be home again.

Monkey screeches!

Norman praises the monkey, pats his head, and all those nice general gestures people do once they've been saved. He is apologetic to the monkey for his earlier actions.

Monkey screeches..runs to blackboard..rewrites equation..looks to Norman for approval.

Norman - You’re fired.

END

Keeping the two lines of dialogue since the punch of the cartoon is the last line, and one before hand wont make it seem so out of no where. I didn't change much since people said that their main beef was that the character was Steven Hawking and no one new. Hope this works for everyone. 

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